Showtime!” by Janice Hardy. Just by the title alone, I have no doubt you
know what we covered. Yep – Show don’t Tell – a simple concept to some, but not
so simple to everyone.
other authors, I feel I have beaten this stubborn horse to death. And still
someone tells me a simple fact and makes the well-known light bulb dazzle me
with its brilliance.
what your character is doing, then describe it – that’s show.
KISS works well. Unless the reaching over is important to the plot for some
reason, leave it out.
myself using to-verbs (infinitives) as shown in the example above. As soon as
the speaker mentioned this as a flag for telling, my stomach tightened. I
glanced around at the others in the room…who were all glancing around at the
others in the room. Seems like there were more than a few guilty culprits. (Being
a bit of a bitch, that did make me feel better….my bad!)
before, when, wondered, with, in, felt, sound of, tried to, could see, as,
considered, thought, realize….
Heck, that’s half my vocabulary. My dry tongue
glued itself to the top of my mouth. Panic creeped into my brain, squeezing the
tiny cells. Thoughts exploded. Suffering succotash! My full-length book will
end up as a novella!!!